Zoe and Ged, sound asleep, were jolted awake. They sat up, confused. "What's going on? What happened?"

A terrified group of people, pale and trembling, pointed back the way they'd come, speechless. Tiffany slapped one of them. "You useless bunch! Can't you be more helpful?"

The boy stammered, "A snake… a huge python!"

Tiffany thought, So that's what scared them?

Kenneth and Melody rushed over, anxious. "What happened?" Kenneth asked, having heard the cries for help. Their calls had echoed through the valley.

Suddenly, a python sprang from the bushes. Kenneth was the first target, but before he could react, Melody pushed him aside, shouting, "Kenneth, watch out!"

He stumbled back as the python caught Melody. Frantic screams erupted; only Tiffany remained calm. "Is this little thing enough to scare you all? What a waste of space," she said, notching an arrow and releasing it with precision.

Her composure shocked everyone. Terrified, they watched, fearing the arrow would hit Melody.

Even Melody felt her blood run cold. She subtly moved aside, narrowly avoiding the arrow as it grazed her neck. The arrow struck the python, which released Melody and fled. The entire sequence happened so fast that no one noticed Melody's quick thinking except Tiffany, who smiled, thinking, She's truly something else.

Kenneth rushed to Melody. "Are you okay? Did you get hurt?"

"I'm fine…" she forced a smile, though shaken.

Kenneth felt guilty and hurt. Melody had risked her life for him.

The tension eased. "Melody cares about Mr. Harper," someone remarked. "She risked her life to save him!"

Another added, "Exactly! I would have fainted!"

A murmur reached Kenneth's ears.

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• Sentence structure: Improved sentence flow and structure for better readability.
• Word choice: Replaced weaker words with stronger, more descriptive ones.
• Punctuation: Corrected punctuation errors, including comma splices and unnecessary commas.
• Dialogue: Improved dialogue formatting and punctuation.
• Removed extraneous material: The advertisement for a novel website was removed.
• Paragraphing: Improved paragraph breaks for better clarity.
• Character names: Maintained consistency in capitalization of names.

The revised passage is clearer, more concise, and more engaging for the reader.